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從前有一個農夫，他每天辛苦的工作，所以田裡的農作物都長得田很好。
有一天，一隻兔子跑過來，農夫看到了，就把牠捉住了。
他捉住兔子之後，就快快樂樂的把牠拿去賣，
有一個人看到這隻肥肥胖胖的兔子，就把牠買走了。
農夫自從捉到兔子，賺到了錢以後，就改變主意了，
他想說賣兔子比種田輕鬆多了，所以他不再種田了，整天等著抓兔子。
日子一天一天的過去了，他的田長了很多雜草，而且也沒有等不到兔子。
現在他才知道天下沒有這麼輕鬆的事，所以他繼續像以前一樣辛勤的工作。
老師：句子要寫完整，讀者才能了解你所想表達的意思，
所以要多唸幾次，自己多想想喔！
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今天是月考，昨天晚上爸和同學幫我複習過了，
今天我一定要拿到九十五分以，上讓爸爸、媽媽快樂。
考試時，我們把桌子搬開，搬完後，
老師開始發考卷，我們又安靜又認真的寫。
在考試時，有人在東張西望，不知道在看什麼？
時間還沒到時，有人已經交考卷了，
時間到時，有人還沒寫完，没寫完的人要繼續寫，老師說一定要寫完。
下課時，①幾乎没有人寫完，那些沒寫完的人一直想要寫完，
因為上課時就不能寫而且不可以玩，
我想大家一定很想玩，應該沒有人不想玩，
②下課時，我忘了拿東西，我一進室看了一下，
只有老師在打電腦，沒有一毎同學在。
隔天，老師發下考，老師說：「誰誰誰，幾分。」
發到我時，老師說：「王姸珺，九十六分。」，
老師又說：「王姸珺把一艘船的艘寫成燒焦的燒了。」，
我下次一定要加油。
老師：①沒有寫完的人佔多數嗎？
②下課時，不是很多人沒寫，完還在寫嗎？怎麼又沒有人了呢？ ＊簡單的題目容易發揮，但要把握到重點喔！
結尾的感想也寫得太簡單了，沒看到你自己的「感受」喔！
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有一天螞蟻一家人一起出去玩，他們一邊走一邊唱歌，非常快樂。
突然烏雲密佈，下起雨來了，螞蟻一家人很著急，不知道有什麼辦法，
這時螞蟻媽媽看到一個香菇，就叫小螞蟻爸爸躲在香菇下。
雨停了，牠們繼續往前走，碰到了一條小河，螞蟻媽媽看到了一片葉子，
牠叫大家坐到葉子船上，就輕鬆的過了小河。
過了小河，牠們看到了一粒一粒的豆子，小螞蟻自己一個人搬不動，
這時候螞蟻媽媽說：「你一個力氣太小了，
如果要有兩個人合作的話的力氣，才就可以動了。
兩人一搬，果然一搬就把豆子搬起來了，小螞蟻心想：「我媽最聰明了。」
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我是一棵行道樹，我站在街頭已經三十五年了，
我的枝葉非常茂盛，看起來就像一個屋頂，可以為人們遮太陽，
所以人們非常喜歡我。
我是一棵行道樹，我站在街頭已經三十五年了，
我看到很多房屋漸漸變成①便利商店了，②那邊的人種了很多朋友，
樹上的花開的時候，我聞到了花香味。
我是一棵行道樹，我站在街頭已經三十五年了，
我看到車子越來越多了，我聽到汽車的聲音，③好吵喔，吵得我受不了，
我真想去沒車子的地方。
我是一棵行道樹，我站在街頭已經三十五年了， 老師：①「便利商店」並不像一般住家那麼多啊，如果說「多了很多便利商店，讓生活更方便。」會更好喔！
我覺得最有趣的事，是從前的小朋友長大了，
我想現在的小朋友也會長大的。④
②「種了很多『朋友』」？原本要寫「樹」嗎？但是便利商店的人會種很多樹嗎？要考慮到實際的情形喔！
③少了一句話，有時候就會讓人家看不懂你的文章，要多注意喔！
④如果你是行道樹，看到小朋友長大了，會有什麼感覺呢？
＊寫完文章後，多唸幾遍，可以幫助你發現漏掉的文句，不順的地方，也是很重要的。
＊文章的結尾非常重要，最後一段的重點又是「心裡的感覺」，所以你這篇文章少了「重點中的重點」，很可惜喔。
There are many stores inside SOGO department store,
for examples, book store, toy store, pet store, shoe store
and clothing store but sometimes we go to Carrefour instead of SOGO.
I like to go to SOGO's book store very much.
Inside the book store has many books.
I like to read many books.
The book I read has snow white and the seven little dwarfs.
Inside the book store has first , second and third floors.
The book store has an elevator too but I always walk the stairs.
In the book store has many books I can read and books I like to read.
But sometimes my father says we cannot buy because
father thinks mama will be very very very angry. So we cannot buy.
If we run out of vegetables,
we will go to the night market to buy some vegetables.
In night market, there have Tofu, Carrot, Bread and many things.
I like to go to play at LonShang elementary school.
LonShang elementary school has many things to play.
I like to go to LonShang elementary school very much.
Every time I go to play at LonShang elementary school,
there are a lot of people.
Teacher Jason told us that Dr. Sun-Yat-Sun
formed a Whampoa army school.
He wanted to form Whampoa army school was
because he wanted China to be united.
There were four hundred and ninety-nine people went to
Whampoa arm school.
Chiang Kai Shek was the principal of the school.
Armed Forces Museum is opened October 31st, 1961.
Inside has many things. It has pictures, guns and swords on the wall.
We saw many people were fighting in the battle.
We also played gun. We saw many things.
Words on the picture are in Chinese, not in English, so it is very easy.
In freetime I play with my dog.
My dog is cute. She is very small.
I like her because she likes me all the time.
In free time I like to draw. I draw people .
I draw many people because the people I draw are cute .
In freetime I watch TV. TV. shows are good
because TV. shows are funny.
In freetime I play WII. WII is good.
WII is very good because WII is fun.
In freetime I go the playground of LonShange elementary school to play.
I play sand, slide, ball and many things.
I like the school because the LonShange elementary school
is fun place to hangout.
In freetime I go to play with Pauline.
Her house has many dogs. Her parets own a dog store.
The dogs are cute. We play with Pauline and her dogs.
One day, the lion was sleeping under a tree.
There was a mouse played on the lion’s back.
He woke lion up. The lion was angry.
The lion wanted to eat the mouse.
“Please don’t eat me. I will help you one day.” said the mouse,
And the lion let the mouse go, and went back to sleep again.
One day, the lion was caught by hunters.
“Help. Help. Who can help me.”, said the lion
but there was no one could hear him.
The mouse saw it. He bited through the net.
Then the lion was free. “Thank you . “, said the lion.
So the lion and the mouse became friends .
The first day of school. I played with my good friend, Ronnie.
We played ball. We were happy.
In school, I read my book. The book was good.
We will be smart if we read books. I really like to read books.
In school, I drew animals. I can draw many animals.
I like to draw. I am a drawing master. I like many aminals.
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